Here is my second attempt at a pitch and I completely rewrote it. I did not really receive any feedback that really had to do with the presentation of the pitch, but more so regarding my idea. I have tried to clarify a few things in this pitch.
Any feedback on this presentation is most welcomed. It can only help me improve, so no hard feelings.
Wow, I found your opportunity to be very interesting! I had never thought of that idea before, but after hearing about your opportunity, I think it would be really good. Having a service that could help families relocate as well as work with them to meet their needs in affordability would be super helpful! You and I have similar opportunities in that we both thought out of the box with our opportunities. In all, great job on your post and I would love to see this idea implemented! Feel free to check out my blog post for this assignment!
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Hello Sonja. I think your idea can help millions of people to be put into homes that they want. I just feel that there are a lot of hoops and red tape to cut before getting the idea off the ground running. I like that your pitch had facts to back up your claims, that is very important in getting your point across and it is a smart technique to get people interested. Here is the link to my post http://stefanent3003.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
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ReplyDeleteFirst of all, your presentation overall was very well done and professional. Easy to understand, relatable, and a very good idea was presented in this video. This is an idea that so many people in communities all over the US would be interested in. You could also probably receive donations and funding from successful UF Alumni that want to give back in Gainesville. If you get a chance, check out my blog: http://ghioto.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-2.html
Hi Sonja,
ReplyDeleteI think you did a really great job with your presentation of your idea. You spoke clearly, your stage presence was great and you had a very convincing pitch! It almost sounded like it was from a commercial. This was the hardest part for me because I am terrible at public speaking and also camera shy.